"Deep Blue Sassafras" / Will Dockery (c & c)

[Will Dockery]

Deep Blue Sassafras

You never left
as another day passes.

Your love
my love
continues.

You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.

But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.

The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.

I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.

The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.

Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.

-Will Dockery

(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

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Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Aaaahhhh! So beautiful, so many unanswered questions! I'm really going to have to ponder this one for a while!

[Will Dockery]

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Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Aaaahhhh! So beautiful, so many unanswered questions! I'm really going to have to ponder this one for a while!

Thanks for the read and comment... I hope that the ongoing poems will answer as many questions as they raise...

;)

[h***@gmail.com]

The olfactory bulb begins in the nose,
and runs along the base of the brain
with connections to the amygdala and
hippocampus, which may explain why
smells are so successful at eliciting our
emotions and memories. Make scents?

[ME]

Right on the nose Corey!!!

[Will Dockery]

Post by e***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Aaaahhhh! So beautiful, so many unanswered questions! I'm really going to have to ponder this one for a while!

Yet another of my poems set in Atlanta 1982...

I think perhaps I should simply assemble all these into one chronological volume, and see how the story flows, complete.

[ME]

Don't bother will. No one wants to read about your nasty, whore ridden take on Atlanta.
I've noticed almost all your shit contains your supposed endeavors of drugs, cheap hookers and rundown neighborhoods.
That is not the Atlanta so many of us who really lived there remember.
(By 'lived there' I mean had real lives and thrived there)

[Will Dockery]

Post by ME
Don't bother will. No one wants to read about your nasty, whore ridden take on Atlanta.
I've noticed almost all your shit contains your supposed endeavors of drugs, cheap hookers and rundown neighborhoods.
That is not the Atlanta so many of us who really lived there remember.
(By 'lived there' I mean had real lives and thrived there)

So...

Write your own poems about Atlanta, and I'll write mine.

Fair enough?

:)

[Will Dockery]

Post by ME
Don't bother will. No one wants to read about your nasty, whore ridden take on Atlanta.
I've noticed almost all your shit contains your supposed endeavors of drugs, cheap hookers and rundown neighborhoods.
That is not the Atlanta so many of us who really lived there remember.
(By 'lived there' I mean had real lives and thrived there)

So...

Write your own poems about Atlanta, and I'll write mine.

Fair enough?

:)

[Dylan K]

Great imagery and great poem!! Could be imone of my favorites by u!

[Will Dockery]

Post by Dylan K
Great imagery and great poem!! Could be imone of my favorites by u!

Thanks, Dylan K.

:)

[Will Dockery]

Post by Dylan K
Great imagery and great poem!! Could be imone of my favorites by u!

Thanks, Dylan K.

:)

[Zod]

That tell a good story.......

[Will Dockery]

i justt saw your post here, Zod, and glad the story developed well for you in this one.

[p***@gmail.com]

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

[Will Dockery]

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Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

Thank you, for reading and for the kind comment, Peg... I'm very pleased with the way this one came out, as well.

Looking forward to any poetry or other writings you'd like to post here.

👍

--
Peg O'Neill - Singer/Songwriter

https://www.reverbnation.com/pegoneill

[Will Dockery]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

Thank you, for reading and for the kind comment, Peg... I'm very pleased with the way this one came out, as well.
Looking forward to any poetry or other writings you'd like to post here.
👍

Peg O'Neill - Singer/Songwriter
https://www.reverbnation.com/pegoneill

Peg O'Neill is another friend of mine who visits, reads and posts here, Pendragon... Peg is from Brockton, MA.

Since you asked.

:)

[h***@gmail.com]

You ever hear of a jazz musician named Trombone Shorty?
If you like New Orleans style jazz, you should check him out.
He headlined the show I worked last night. The guy can play.

[Will Dockery]

Post by h***@gmail.com
You ever hear of a jazz musician named Trombone Shorty?
If you like New Orleans style jazz, you should check him out.
He headlined the show I worked last night. The guy can play.

No, but I an checking Trombone Shorty out right now:

https://www.reverbnation.com/tromboneshorty

Thanks, and good morning, Corey...

:)

[h***@gmail.com]

No worries; have a good one.

[Will Dockery]

Post by h***@gmail.com
No worries; have a good one.

Hello Corey, you may have missed all this, yesterday, where I mentioned perhaps some assistance from you, as our poetry group Reverend:

=============================================

https://groups.google.com/d/msg/alt.arts.poetry.comments/qLg00yuuztU/OpJcLTxPDQAJ

I have a $50 money order for you, Thomas aka Jim.

Drop by Wednesday night and I'll give it to you... made out to any name you please.

Why not just take the refund and let us end this?

I have considered mailing the $50 to Corey, as he once suggested, since I do know his mailing address.

From there, Corey can either forward the money order on to Thomas, or donate it to his church, whatever.

I'm offering to pay off the debt, it seems silly to continue to refuse the payment.

In my opinion.

=================================================

Just an idea, Corey... but a pretty good one, I think.

:)

[h***@gmail.com]

Yes, I missed all of that. I never suggested you send me $50.
I don't know where you got that from, but please don't do that.

[h***@gmail.com]

In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

[Will Dockery]

Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

Hello Corey, thanks for giving your opinion on the $50 money order flame war.

I have even made a sincere apology to Jim/Thomas on the matter, and for all the confusion that followed, , I can't remember now if he accepted it or not.

I'll post a link to that here, and perhaps bump that thread to the top, shortly.

[Cujo DeSockpuppet]

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Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

Hello Corey, thanks for giving your opinion on the $50 money order flame war.
I have even made a sincere apology to Jim/Thomas on the matter, and
for all the confusion that followed, , I can't remember now if he
accepted it or not.
I'll post a link to that here, and perhaps bump that thread to the top, shortly.

So your money order to your daughter basically was another one of your many
proven lies?

Nice to know, deadbeat.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Cujo DeSockpuppet

Post by Will Dockery

Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

Hello Corey, thanks for giving your opinion on the $50 money order flame war.
I have even made a sincere apology to Jim/Thomas on the matter, and
for all the confusion that followed, , I can't remember now if he
accepted it or not.
I'll post a link to that here, and perhaps bump that thread to the top, shortly.

So your money order to your daughter basically

<snip>

Obviously the money order I gave my daughter, as he suggested, was not good enough for Thomas/Jim, since he's still complaining about the money.

So I have another money order for him, after which this matter will finally be settled.

:)

[ME]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Cujo DeSockpuppet

Post by Will Dockery

Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

Hello Corey, thanks for giving your opinion on the $50 money order flame war.
I have even made a sincere apology to Jim/Thomas on the matter, and
for all the confusion that followed, , I can't remember now if he
accepted it or not.
I'll post a link to that here, and perhaps bump that thread to the top, shortly.

So your money order to your daughter basically

<snip>
Obviously the money order I gave my daughter, as he suggested, was not good enough for Thomas/Jim, since he's still complaining about the money.
So I have another money order for him, after which this matter will finally be settled.
:)

I tell you what will. I’ll give Jim $50 if you’ll stop with posting for the rest of the day!

[Will Dockery]

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Post by Will Dockery

Post by Will Dockery

Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

Hello Corey, thanks for giving your opinion on the $50 money order flame war.
I have even made a sincere apology to Jim/Thomas on the matter, and
for all the confusion that followed, , I can't remember now if he
accepted it or not.
I'll post a link to that here, and perhaps bump that thread to the
top, shortly.

<snip>

Post by ME

Post by Will Dockery
Obviously the money order I gave my daughter, as he suggested, was not good enough for Thomas/Jim, since he's still complaining about the money.
So I have another money order for him, after which this matter will finally be settled.
:)

I tell you what will. I’ll give Jim $50 if you’ll stop with posting for the rest of the day!

That is a tempting offer.

:)

[ME]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by ME

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Will Dockery

Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

Hello Corey, thanks for giving your opinion on the $50 money order
flame war.
I have even made a sincere apology to Jim/Thomas on the matter, and
for all the confusion that followed, , I can't remember now if he
accepted it or not.
I'll post a link to that here, and perhaps bump that thread to the
top, shortly.

<snip>

Post by ME

Post by Will Dockery
Obviously the money order I gave my daughter, as he suggested, was not good enough for Thomas/Jim, since he's still complaining about the money.
So I have another money order for him, after which this matter will finally be settled.
:)

I tell you what will. I’ll give Jim $50 if you’ll stop with posting for the rest of the day!

That is a tempting offer.
:)

Please take the offer!!

[Will Dockery]

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Post by Will Dockery

Post by ME

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Will Dockery

Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

Hello Corey, thanks for giving your opinion on the $50 money order
flame war.
I have even made a sincere apology to Jim/Thomas on the matter, and
for all the confusion that followed, , I can't remember now if he
accepted it or not.
I'll post a link to that here, and perhaps bump that thread to the
top, shortly.

<snip>

Post by ME

Post by Will Dockery
Obviously the money order I gave my daughter, as he suggested, was not good enough for Thomas/Jim, since he's still complaining about the money.
So I have another money order for him, after which this matter will finally be settled.
:)

I tell you what will. I’ll give Jim $50 if you’ll stop with posting for the rest of the day!

That is a tempting offer.
:)

Please take the offer!!

It is worth considering...

[ME]

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Post by ME

Post by Will Dockery

Post by ME

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Will Dockery

Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

Hello Corey, thanks for giving your opinion on the $50 money order
flame war.
I have even made a sincere apology to Jim/Thomas on the matter, and
for all the confusion that followed, , I can't remember now if he
accepted it or not.
I'll post a link to that here, and perhaps bump that thread to the
top, shortly.

<snip>

Post by ME

Post by Will Dockery
Obviously the money order I gave my daughter, as he suggested, was not good enough for Thomas/Jim, since he's still complaining about the money.
So I have another money order for him, after which this matter will finally be settled.
:)

I tell you what will. I’ll give Jim $50 if you’ll stop with posting for the rest of the day!

That is a tempting offer.
:)

Please take the offer!!

It is worth considering...

Well, it is only the 4th of the month. If you don’t take it today, I’ll make the offer later in the month, when the money from the check is gone.

[Will Dockery]

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Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

Hello Corey, thanks for giving your opinion on the $50 money order
flame war.
I have even made a sincere apology to Jim/Thomas on the matter, and
for all the confusion that followed, , I can't remember now if he
accepted it or not.
I'll post a link to that here, and perhaps bump that thread to the
top, shortly.

<snip>

Post by ME

Post by Will Dockery
Obviously the money order I gave my daughter, as he suggested, was not good enough for Thomas/Jim, since he's still complaining about the money.
So I have another money order for him, after which this matter will finally be settled.
:)

I tell you what will. I’ll give Jim $50 if you’ll stop with posting for the rest of the day!

That is a tempting offer.
:)

Please take the offer!!

I see now that Thomas/Jim is saying give the fifty dollar money order to Zod, which sounds like a good idea:

"...wanting to send Corey the $50..now lets review...the fifty was sent to help his down and out friend...so here's what I suggest for the fifty...hand it to where it was suppose to go..your good buddy Zod..or whatever he calls himself these days...his to use as he sees fit..."
-Thomas Jones

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The $50 Money Order for Thomas/Jim.

[Will Dockery]

Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

https://groups.google.com/d/msg/alt.arts.poetry.comments/kVbjPshWvjE/7DF5YnmlDQAJ

You also wrote the above on the same day, which I appreciate, whether you remember writing it or not, Corey.

[h***@gmail.com]

So one comment you 'appreciate' while the other you misquote
and completely misunderstand. I guess you can't get them all.

[Will Dockery]

Post by h***@gmail.com
So one comment you 'appreciate' while the other you misquote
and completely misunderstand. I guess you can't get them all.

Okay, so if you didn't mean what I thought you meant, what was it that you
did mean?

[ME]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by h***@gmail.com
In my opinion, you don't owe Jim any money whatsoever,
but you do owe him an apology for all the confusion; just
like he owes you an apology for questioning your integrity.
Of course that's just my opinion, and you know what they
say about opinions. Everybody has one, and they all stink.

Hello Corey, thanks for giving your opinion on the $50 money order flame war.
I have even made a sincere apology to Jim/Thomas on the matter, and for all the confusion that followed, , I can't remember now if he accepted it or not.
I'll post a link to that here, and perhaps bump that thread to the top, shortly.

Great segue will!!

[h***@gmail.com]

You're welcome. In my opinion, you have not made
a sincere apology to Jim on the matter, or accepted
responsibility for all the confusion that followed, but
like I said, that's just my stinky little old opinion.

[Chafetz Chayim ha'Yehu'di]

Post by h***@gmail.com
You're welcome. In my opinion, you have not made
a sincere apology to Jim on the matter, or accepted
responsibility for all the confusion that followed, but
like I said, that's just my stinky little old opinion.

Shalom & Boker tov, bivocationalism...how about Jim giving Will an apology for the months of libel, the ill-disguised death threats?
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
STEPHAN PICKERING / חפץ ח"ם בן אברהם
Torah אלילה Yehu'di Apikores / Philologia Kabbalistica Speculativa Researcher
לחיות זמן רב ולשגשג...לעולם לא עוד
THE KABBALAH FRACTALS PROJECT
לעולם לא אשכח

IN PROGRESS: Shabtai Zisel benAvraham v'Rachel Riva:
davening in the musematic dark

[h***@gmail.com]

In my opinion, there were no libels or I'll-disguised death threats,
but I don't read everything here, and that's just my stinky opinion.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Chafetz Chayim ha'Yehu'di

Post by h***@gmail.com
You're welcome. In my opinion, you have not made
a sincere apology to Jim on the matter, or accepted
responsibility for all the confusion that followed, but
like I said, that's just my stinky little old opinion.

Shalom & Boker tov, bivocationalism...how about Jim giving Will an apology for the months of libel, the ill-disguised death threats?
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
STEPHAN PICKERING / חפץ ח"ם בן אברהם
Torah אלילה Yehu'di Apikores / Philologia Kabbalistica Speculativa Researcher
לחיות זמן רב ולשגשג...לעולם לא עוד
THE KABBALAH FRACTALS PROJECT
לעולם לא אשכח
davening in the musematic dark

Or better yet, if he'd stop his endless complaining... I have offered him a full refund, but he has constantly refused that.

[Will Dockery]

Post by h***@gmail.com
You're welcome. In my opinion, you have not made
a sincere apology to Jim on the matter, or accepted
responsibility for all the confusion that followed, but
like I said, that's just my stinky little old opinion.

https://groups.google.com/d/msg/alt.arts.poetry.comments/kVbjPshWvjE/ABEWKobkDQAJ

Here we go, Corey.

I may have read you wrong but it looks like you're saying my apology to Jim wasn't good enough, that it wasn't sincere.

[h***@gmail.com]

You misquoted me, and misunderstood
what you read, exactly like I said you did.

[Will Dockery]

Post by h***@gmail.com
You misquoted me, and misunderstood
what you read, exactly like I said you did.

So, can you explain the difference in what I thought I had read and what yu really did write?

[h***@gmail.com]

If explaining the difference in how you think
made a difference in how you think, I'd explain
everything I can, but my explanations obviously
don't make any difference to you. You're going
to think what you're going to think anyway.

[Will Dockery]

Corey wrote in message news:9e929daf-a300-4f5b-a791-***@googlegroups.com...

If explaining the difference in how you think
made a difference in how you think, I'd explain
everything I can, but my explanations obviously
don't make any difference to you. You're going
to think what you're going to think anyway.

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Post by h***@gmail.com
You're welcome. In my opinion, you have not made
a sincere apology to Jim on the matter, or accepted
responsibility for all the confusion that followed,

I take that to mean yoy think my apology to Jim "was not good enough".

How am I not correct?

[Will Dockery]

Post by h***@gmail.com
You're welcome. In my opinion, you have not made
a sincere apology to Jim on the matter, or accepted
responsibility for all the confusion that followed, but
like I said, that's just my stinky little old opinion.

https://groups.google.com/d/msg/alt.arts.poetry.comments/kVbjPshWvjE/ABEWKobkDQAJ

Here we go, Corey.

I may have read you wrong but it looks like you're saying my apology to Jim
wasn't good enough, that it wasn't sincere.

:)

[General Zod]

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

I agree but sassafrass is always green I thought....

Maybe it was the LSD change colors......??

[Will Dockery]

Post by General Zod

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

I agree but sassafrass is always green I thought....

They were blue blooms, perhaps a hybrid.

McCloud, the man who grew them, was quite a gardener.

This seems to be the closest I've seen to McCloud's flowers, Doryphora Sassafras:

https://www.flickr.com/photos/***@N07/9211887243

[Will Dockery]

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Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
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Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

I agree but sassafrass is always green I thought....

They were blue blooms, perhaps a hybrid.
McCloud, the man who grew them, was quite a gardener.

And here:

https://atlasoflife.naturemapr.org/Community/Sighting/3360069

Loading Image...

Doryphora Sassafras.

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by General Zod

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

I agree but sassafrass is always green I thought....

They were blue blooms, perhaps a hybrid.
McCloud, the man who grew them, was quite a gardener.

This may be one of those gold and white vs black and blue dresses things, but those flowers look pretty darn white.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery

Post by General Zod

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

I agree but sassafrass is always green I thought....

They were blue blooms, perhaps a hybrid.
McCloud, the man who grew them, was quite a gardener.

This may be one of those gold and white vs black and blue dresses things, but those flowers look pretty darn white.

I don't have actual photos of McCloud's flowers, which were more what I might call "azure", if I was more pretentious:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Azure_(color)

[General Zod]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery

Post by General Zod

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

I agree but sassafrass is always green I thought....

They were blue blooms, perhaps a hybrid.
McCloud, the man who grew them, was quite a gardener.

This may be one of those gold and white vs black and blue dresses things, but those flowers look pretty darn white.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Azure_(color)

Yes, yes, it comes together now...………….

[Will Dockery]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery

Post by General Zod

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to
navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so
far! Yesss...!

I agree but sassafrass is always green I thought....

They were blue blooms, perhaps a hybrid.
McCloud, the man who grew them, was quite a gardener.

This may be one of those gold and white vs black and blue dresses
things, but those flowers look pretty darn white.

I don't have actual photos of McCloud's flowers, which were more what I
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Azure_(color)

Yes, yes, it comes together now...………….

---------------------------------------------------------------------------

It was his little garden at Carolina Lumber, sitting in the sun...

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

<snip>

Post by Michael Pendragon
This may be one of those gold and white vs black and blue dresses things, but those flowers look pretty darn white.

This one is definitely quite a subtle blue:

https://atlasoflife.naturemapr.org/Community/Sighting/3360069

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

<snip>

Post by Michael Pendragon
This may be one of those gold and white vs black and blue dresses things, but those flowers look pretty darn white.

https://atlasoflife.naturemapr.org/Community/Sighting/3360069

Subtle is an understatement; try imperceptibly blue.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

<snip>

Post by Michael Pendragon
This may be one of those gold and white vs black and blue dresses things, but those flowers look pretty darn white.

https://atlasoflife.naturemapr.org/Community/Sighting/3360069

Subtle is an understatement; try imperceptibly blue.

Not to me, but you can see it your way and I can see it mine, no reason for another argument.

:)

[ME]

Post by Michael Pendragon
This may be one of those gold and white vs black and blue dresses things, but those flowers look pretty darn white.

Michael, it’s not named after a color of a flower. It’s named after MDA.
The sassafras tree has no flowers.
I don’t know what the fuck dickwad’s talking about.

[Will Dockery]

Post by General Zod

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

I agree but sassafrass is always green I thought....
Maybe it was the LSD change colors......??

https://atlasoflife.naturemapr.org/Community/Sighting/3360069

Well, LSD does amplify the five senses.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by General Zod

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

I agree but sassafrass is always green I thought....
Maybe it was the LSD change colors......??

https://atlasoflife.naturemapr.org/Community/Sighting/3360069
Well, LSD does amplify the five senses.

And brings the Sixth to the forefront...

[Will Dockery]

Post by General Zod

Post by p***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Very Beautiful, Will! This has to be my fav of all I'Ve read so far! Yesss...!

I agree but sassafrass is always green I thought....
Maybe it was the LSD change colors......??

https://atlasoflife.naturemapr.org/Community/Sighting/3360069

Well, LSD does amplify the five senses... and brings the sixth to the forefront.

Here, almost exactly n the moment, Summer 1982:

XTC - Senses Working Overtime ("English Settlement" | Virgin/Epic, 1982)

[Will Dockery]

Thanks for reading and commenting, Peg.

👍

[Will Dockery]

They were blue blooms, perhaps a hybrid.

McCloud, the man who grew them, was quite a gardener.

[d***@gmail.com]

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Sweet!

[Will Dockery]

Post by d***@gmail.com

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
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Sweet!

Thank you, Dorita.

:)

[ME]

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

[Will Dockery]

Read the poem again.

I wrote that the flowers smelled "like" Sassafras.

[ME]

Bull shit will. It's named for dope, you dope!!

[Will Dockery]

Post by ME
Bull shit will. It's named for dope, you dope!!

Why am I not surprised you seem to have not even read the poem?

:)

[ME]

I read it.
You threw in some shit about giving some deceased girl blue flowers.
But we both know what's behind the title.

[Will Dockery]

Post by ME
I read it.
You threw in some shit about giving some deceased girl blue flowers.
But we both know what's behind the title.

I have no idea what your fantasy about my poem is about, "Me", and frankly, I don't give a damn.

;)

[ME]

I read your fucking poem will. It the shit different title. You pick up a woman, you do her, you leave and have some wonderful memory of her. Sound familiar?
I gave you my take on it. Take it or leave it.

[Will Dockery]

Post by ME
I read your fucking poem will. It the shit different title. You pick up a woman, you do her, you leave and have some wonderful memory of her. Sound familiar?
I gave you my take on it. Take it or leave it.

Great... let's leave it.

Bye bye.

:)

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by ME
I read your fucking poem will. It the shit different title. You pick up a woman, you do her, you leave and have some wonderful memory of her. Sound familiar?
I gave you my take on it. Take it or leave it.

And he found the flowers blooming in a lumber yard ... back when he was squatting in its storeroom.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by ME
I read your fucking poem will. It the shit different title. You pick up a woman, you do her, you leave and have some wonderful memory of her. Sound familiar?
I gave you my take on it. Take it or leave it.

And he found the flowers blooming in a lumber yard ... back when he was squatting in its storeroom.

No, I worked at the lumber company in Atlanta for three years, I only crashed in the break room a few times in Winter of 1981.

Biographical details... since you're so interested in each and every one, en.

:)

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by ME
I read your fucking poem will. It the shit different title. You pick up a woman, you do her, you leave and have some wonderful memory of her. Sound familiar?
I gave you my take on it. Take it or leave it.

And he found the flowers blooming in a lumber yard ... back when he was squatting in its storeroom.

No, I worked at the lumber company in Atlanta for three years, I only crashed in the break room a few times in Winter of 1981.
Biographical details... since you're so interested in each and every one, en.

I can't think of anything less interesting.

As per usual, your title is the best thing about your poem. "Crimson and Clover" ... er, sorry, "Deep Blue Sassafras" is every bit as catchy as "Apple Montage."

You've got a real talent for title writing, Will.

Your poem, also as per usual, demonstrates your profound inability to compose a proper sentence.

Admittedly, that's a slight exaggeration. I was able to find one actual sentence in the poem:

"I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982."

Granted, it isn't a very good sentence ... but I think it just might qualify as one.

The poem itself is 10th rate, sentimental slop: "My love? Do you remember the pretty blue flowers that you said smelled like sassafras? They were the color of your eyes. And though you're gone, I will remember you always, my everlasting love." Sigh!

There isn't an original, or even mildly interesting, thought in the entire piece.

But, hey, it's got that catchy title! So you go, girl!

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon
But, hey, it's got that catchy title

An important part of a poem, to me... so thanks for that much.

:)

[Will Dockery]

With all the sing-song tripe you write, that comes off a bit hypocritical.

Just ask PJR.

:)

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery
With all the sing-song tripe you write, that comes off a bit hypocritical.
Just ask PJR.

What has "sing-song" got to do with it?

Your "poem" doesn't even rhyme.

Your topic is sentimental slop. If it were expressed in rhyme, it would in all probability be sing-song sentimental slop. Rhyme has never been your forte.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon
Rhyme has never been your forte.

Rhyme is relatively new for me in poetry...

[Will Dockery]

A link to the local library?

What's the point with that?

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery
A link to the local library?
What's the point with that?

Go to the library.
Borrow the book.
Read the book.

Unless, of course, they've taken back your card.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery
A link to the local library?
What's the point with that?

Go to the library.
Borrow the book.
Read the book.
Unless, of course, they've taken back your card.

Maybe later, I have other reading on my agenda for now... thanks for the tip, though.

:)

[Will Dockery]

One man's sentimental slip is another man's heart and soul.

"Art is subjective... " after all.

😀

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery
One man's sentimental slip is another man's heart and soul.

7.441 billion people write sentimental slop. It's the other .001 billion who are the true artists.

Post by Will Dockery
"Art is subjective... " after all.

Not in that sense. I refer you to Robert Pirsig's thoughts on "Quality" (in "Zen and the Art of Motorcycle Maintenance").

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon
I refer you to Robert Pirsig's thoughts on "Quality" (in "Zen and the Art
of Motorcycle Maintenance").

Do you have a link, or do you want to put it on your own words?

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon
I refer you to Robert Pirsig's thoughts on "Quality" (in "Zen and the Art
of Motorcycle Maintenance").

Do you have a link, or do you want to put it on your own words?

Try this one.

https://www.cvlga.org/columbus-public-library/

[ME]

Michael, is that where he keeps his extensive library?

[Will Dockery]

Post by ME
Michael, is that where he keeps his extensive library?

You seem confuse... that /is/ a library.

:)

[General Zod]

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon
I refer you to Robert Pirsig's thoughts on "Quality" (in "Zen and the Art
of Motorcycle Maintenance").

Do you have a link, or do you want to put it on your own words?

Try this one.
https://www.cvlga.org/columbus-public-library/

One in Phenix City is better...………………………………………..

[Will Dockery]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon
I refer you to Robert Pirsig's thoughts on "Quality" (in "Zen and the Art
of Motorcycle Maintenance").

Do you have a link, or do you want to put it on your own words?

Try this one.

https://www.cvlga.org/columbus-public-library/

No, they close too early in the day.

:)

[General Zod]

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
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Bravo!

[Will Dockery]

Post by General Zod

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Bravo!

Thanks, old pal.

:)

[Will Dockery]

Corey, are sure you actually read my apology to Jim?

I can link to it, if not.

[h***@gmail.com]

I've read enough of your back and forth
to be of the opinion that you have not
cleared the air, accepted responsibility,
or repaired your relationship with Jim,
and no link to your supposed apology
will change my stinky little old opinion.

[Bean Counter]

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
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That popping summertime... I like.... I like.....

[George J. Dance]

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Heh; I'm writing this 2 months later, when this thread has also become too lengthy to navigate; but I wanted to say something about the poem.

I've been looking for an ending poem since I moved "A Certain Music", and I think this is the one. So I'm putting it on my list as the replacement for TSW.

Editing-wise, I'll say that I do not like the way you end each stanza with a full stop. It's a convention among some free-versers (ggary ggarbage is one that came to mind), but the actual convention is to write longer stanzas that match the sentences, which isn't how you use stanza breaks - your poems these days are more liked linked "American" (ie, Kerouac-style) haiku. It bothers me that you're following that convention, but it bothers even the people who follow it: hence those comments about you "not knowing what a sentence is."

So I cut most of those, using mostly commas but in the opening (therefore defining) stanza nothing, and I removed capital letters to match. I moved one full stop to the middle of a stanza, but I've since decided to propose a punctuation mark you rarely use: a colon. (If you don't want that, I'll make it a full stop instead.) Here's what it looks like with that:

Deep Blue Sassafras

You never left:
As another day passes

your love
my love
continues.

You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.

But those
deep blue flowers in a box,
the color of your eyes,

the deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard

that I brought to you
that summer morning in 1982,

the flowers
that smelled like sassafras,

like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.

[Will Dockery]

Post by George J. Dance

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Heh; I'm writing this 2 months later, when this thread has also become too lengthy to navigate; but I wanted to say something about the poem.
I've been looking for an ending poem since I moved "A Certain Music", and I think this is the one. So I'm putting it on my list as the replacement for TSW.
Editing-wise, I'll say that I do not like the way you end each stanza with a full stop. It's a convention among some free-versers (ggary ggarbage is one that came to mind), but the actual convention is to write longer stanzas that match the sentences, which isn't how you use stanza breaks - your poems these days are more liked linked "American" (ie, Kerouac-style) haiku. It bothers me that you're following that convention, but it bothers even the people who follow it: hence those comments about you "not knowing what a sentence is."
Deep Blue Sassafras
As another day passes
your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box,
the color of your eyes,
the deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard
that I brought to you
that summer morning in 1982,
the flowers
that smelled like sassafras,
like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.

Looking it over, so far I say this is a good edit, George... it keeps the feel of the poem but in a style more seasoned readers might appreciate.

[Will Dockery]

Post by George J. Dance

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Heh; I'm writing this 2 months later, when this thread has also become too lengthy to navigate; but I wanted to say something about the poem.
I've been looking for an ending poem since I moved "A Certain Music", and I think this is the one. So I'm putting it on my list as the replacement for TSW.
Editing-wise, I'll say that I do not like the way you end each stanza with a full stop. It's a convention among some free-versers (ggary ggarbage is one that came to mind), but the actual convention is to write longer stanzas that match the sentences, which isn't how you use stanza breaks - your poems these days are more liked linked "American" (ie, Kerouac-style) haiku. It bothers me that you're following that convention, but it bothers even the people who follow it: hence those comments about you "not knowing what a sentence is."
Deep Blue Sassafras
As another day passes
your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box,
the color of your eyes,
the deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard
that I brought to you
that summer morning in 1982,
the flowers
that smelled like sassafras,
like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.

I had given you carte blanche to edit, George, anyhow.. as long as content isn't altered without discussion... carry on, my friend.

[Will Dockery]

At first glance it looks like a good edit, George.

I'm on the road with the gizmo right now, so... more later.

😀

[Norman Bean]

Post by Will Dockery
Deep Blue Sassafras
You never left
as another day passes.
Your love
my love
continues.
You sleep
or you wander,
depending on the chosen myth.
But those
deep blue flowers in a box
the color of your eyes.
The deep blue flowers
I found blooming
in the lumber yard.
I brought them to you
that summer morning in 1982.
The flowers
that smelled like sassafras.
Like you,
never leave my thoughts
day in, day out.
-Will Dockery
(The original thread for this poem has become too lengthy to navigate, thus, a re-post for comment and critique.)

Reads good in re write formt style...……….