Grey Matter Melody

[Mr. Spacey]

Grey Matter Melody

Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.

Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.

Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.

I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.

By Mr. Spacey

[Will Dockery]

One of your best poems, Spacey.

😀

[Will Dockery]

One of your best poems, Mr. Spacey.

😀

[Brainiac Five]

Post by Will Dockery
One of your best poems, Mr. Spacey.
😀

Thanks.........

[Brainiac Five]

Post by Will Dockery
One of your best poems, Mr. Spacey.
😀

Thank Yuh...

[Slick Rick Spacely]

Post by Will Dockery
One of your best poems, Mr. Spacey.
😀

Thank yuh Dock........................

[General Zod]

Post by Will Dockery
One of your best poems, Mr. Spacey.
😀

Thank...............

[George J. Dance]

Post by Mr. Spacey
Grey Matter Melody
Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.
Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.
Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.
I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.
By Mr. Spacey

Very sad - the subject, not the poem. The poem is nice. There's enough ambiguity, with lines like "your eyes are closed," and "I'm shooting" etc., to get the reader involved, trying to figure out what happened.

It reminds a bit me of Robert Morpheal (you'll see his work over on alt.arts.poetry.urban, and a few other groups - he was driven off aapc long ago.).

[h***@gmail.com]

Was the poor man driven crazy?
My memory's a bit hazy.
Was he driven in a hearse?
Was it driving in reverse?

[Will Dockery]

Agreed, the method and movement of the poem works well.

[Major Liberty]

Post by George J. Dance

Post by Mr. Spacey
Grey Matter Melody
Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.
Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.
Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.
I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.
By Mr. Spacey

Very sad - the subject, not the poem. The poem is nice. There's enough ambiguity, with lines like "your eyes are closed," and "I'm shooting" etc., to get the reader involved, trying to figure out what happened.
It reminds a bit me of Robert Morpheal (you'll see his work over on alt.arts.poetry.urban, and a few other groups - he was driven off aapc long ago.).

Thank yuh George........................

[Good Time Charley]

Post by George J. Dance

Post by Mr. Spacey
Grey Matter Melody
Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.
Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.
Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.
I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.
By Mr. Spacey

Very sad - the subject, not the poem. The poem is nice. There's enough ambiguity, with lines like "your eyes are closed," and "I'm shooting" etc., to get the reader involved, trying to figure out what happened.
It reminds a bit me of Robert Morpheal (you'll see his work over on alt.arts.poetry.urban, and a few other groups - he was driven off aapc long ago.).

Thank you GD.....

[Will Dockery]

Agreed, George... and looking forward to those new poems Zod hinted at having written, recently.

[Mr. Spacey]

Post by Mr. Spacey
Grey Matter Melody
Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.
Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.
Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.
I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.
By Mr. Spacey

Thank for the kindness to my poems...………...

[Will Dockery]

Yes, at least here we archive The poetry for future generations to discover and enjoy.

:)

[General Zod]

Post by Will Dockery
Yes, at least here we archive The poetry for future generations to discover and enjoy.
:)

I know right...………..

[Mr. Spacey]

Post by Mr. Spacey
Grey Matter Melody
Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.
Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.
Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.
I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.
By Mr. Spacey

Keeping the words on the top shelf.....

[Will Dockery]

One of your better poems, Zod.

😀

[Will Dockery]

Damn right, old son.

Now keep the poetry rolling out...

😀

[General Zod]

Post by Mr. Spacey
Grey Matter Melody
Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.
Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.
Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.
I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.
By Mr. Spacey

Thanks for reading …………………….

[Will Dockery]

Likewise, Zod.

:)

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery
Likewise, Zod.

Slurpback.

[Will Dockery]

Slobber on, Pendragon.

😀

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery
Slobber on, Pendragon.

You do realize that a similar sentiment is implicit in my last post?

On second thought, you probably don't.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery
Slobber on, Pendragon.

You do realize that a similar sentiment

No, because it looks like .you/ are doing the real slobbering here, sniffing behind posts that you have no real interest in.

In fact, you either haven't read or can't understand Zod's poetry from the clueless look of your spambot posts.

:)

[Chafetz Chayim ha'Yehu'di]

Will...you will note that FakeJewScarlotti is 'at it' this day, searching for genuflecting puppets. In his case, he always faces away from his 'victims', on his knees.



~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
STEPHAN PICKERING / חפץ ח"ם בן אברהם
Torah אלילה Yehu'di Apikores / Philologia Kabbalistica Speculativa Researcher
לחיות זמן רב ולשגשג...לעולם לא עוד
THE KABBALAH FRACTALS PROJECT
לעולם לא אשכח

IN PROGRESS: Shabtai Zisel ben

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Chafetz Chayim ha'Yehu'di
Will...you will note that FakeJewScarlotti is 'at it' this day, searching for genuflecting puppets. In his case, he always faces away from his 'victims', on his knees.

Is that how "Uncle Forry" kept you, Pickles?

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Chafetz Chayim ha'Yehu'di
Will...you will note that FakeJewScarlotti is 'at it' this day, searching
for genuflecting puppets. In his case, he always faces away from his
'victims', on his knees.

Is that how "Uncle Forry" kept you

In your fantasies, obviously...

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery
Slobber on, Pendragon.

You do realize that a similar sentiment is implicit in my last post?

I see that you think fighting slobber with more slobber will work, and I was
simply pointing that hypocrisy of yours out, Pen.

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery
Slobber on, Pendragon.

You do realize that a similar sentiment is implicit in my last post?

I see that you think fighting slobber with more slobber will work, and I was
simply pointing that hypocrisy of yours out, Pen.

Look up "hypocrisy," Will.

[Will Dockery]

You provide the definition with every post, Pen.

:)

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery
You provide the definition with every post, Pen.

That's just childish name-calling, Will.

If you are accusing me of hypocrisy, provide examples.

NOTE: The example you'd cited above does not fit the standard definition of "hypocrisy."

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon
If you are accusing me of hypocrisy

I have in the past, when you've demonstrated your hypocrisy.

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon
If you are accusing me of hypocrisy

I have in the past, when you've demonstrated your hypocrisy.

Post past examples here:

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon
Post past examples here

No, I'll just point them out when I see one, Pen, as I did here.

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon
Post past examples here

No, I'll just point them out when I see one, Pen, as I did here.

As you did here?

IOW: You've accused me of hypocrisy in the past with no more reason than you had above.

Thank you for confirming that.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon
You've accused me of hypocrisy in the past

When you've shown hypocrisy, yes.

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon
You've accused me of hypocrisy in the past

When you've shown hypocrisy, yes.

Place examples here:

[Will Dockery]

The example that began this discussion, then... you whine about slurping so much you wind up slobbering all over the thread yourself, Pendragon.

😀

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery
The example that began this discussion, then... you whine about slurping so much you wind up slobbering all over the thread yourself, Pendragon.

Hypocrisy would mean that I was doing the same thing I am accusing you of having done.

I accused you and Zod of using the group for a reciprocal marathon slurpfest.

And while you can claim that my complaint constitutes "slobbering" (which is not a synonym for "slurping," btw), it remains a complaint, and not in any way a "slurp" (praising someone's work as a means of stroking their ego -- often in return for, and in expectation of, reciprocal ego-strokes).

Therefore, your use of "hypocrite" is inappropriate.

[Good Time Charley]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon
If you are accusing me of hypocrisy

I have in the past, when you've demonstrated your hypocrisy.

Thanks.............

[Will Dockery]

You're almost as obsessed with FJA as you are Stephan, aren't you, Pendragon?

😀

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery
You're almost as obsessed with FJA as you are Stephan, aren't you, Pendragon?

I've been reading up on him.

[Will Dockery]

For information on FJA in the 1970s, Google "Perry Rhodan".

[Will Dockery]

You are, or were, doing the exact same thing, Pendragon.

[Michael Pendragon]

Post by Will Dockery
You are, or were, doing the exact same thing, Pendragon.

Who was I complimenting, Will?

I identified your post to Zod as a "Slurpback."

Believe it not, that's a negative thing.

[Will Dockery]

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery
You are, or were, doing the exact same thing, Pendragon.

Who was I

<snipped for focus>

Slurping, slobbering, sniffing behind, bumping... all are pretty much the same action... and you do them all at one time or another, Pendragon.

Yet you whine when others do these things, or similar actions.

Many would call that hypocrisy.

[m***@gmail.com]

Post by Will Dockery

Post by Michael Pendragon

Post by Will Dockery
You are, or were, doing the exact same thing, Pendragon.

Who was I

<snipped for focus>
Slurping, slobbering, sniffing behind, bumping... all are pretty much the same action... and you do them all at one time or another, Pendragon.

No, Will, they aren't.

Slurping is a gratuitous, self-serving, usually reciprocal compliment.
Slobbering is ... not an internet term that I'm aware of.
Sniffing behind ... is a term you appear to have made up for anyone who leaves a negative comment on one of your threads.
Bumping is leaving a pointless comment on a "dead" thread in order to re-open it (thus moving it to the top of the "unread" list).

Post by Will Dockery
Yet you whine when others do these things, or similar actions.

I'm here for the poetry, Will. I don't appreciate having to click on 100 "Outdamnstanding"s and 100 "Thanks for the Nod,Zod"s in order to clear up all the threads that have been pointlessly "bumped" by you and your pooch.

Post by Will Dockery
Many would call that hypocrisy.

Only in the land of drug-addled, illiterate hillbillies.

[e***@gmail.com]

Fine poetry.

[General Zod]

Post by e***@gmail.com
Fine poetry.

Thank yuhs................

[Ellen Horny]

Post by General Zod

Post by e***@gmail.com
Fine poetry.

Thank yuhs................

George, you are such a wordsmith. Can you explain why you use grey instead of gray in your poem?

[r***@gmail.com]

Post by Mr. Spacey
Grey Matter Melody
Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.
Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.
Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.
I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.

Commentaries on the poetrys glady and happily wanted...……………….

i know i am guilty of this self-same form of expression, but i find it clichéd, using/combining/comparing opposites/polarized ideas under the guise or aegis of being poetic, like tomorrow's present or yesterday's roots, although i know that last one was exactly an oxymoron.

i like your poetic format though.

[r***@gmail.com]

Post by r***@gmail.com

Post by Mr. Spacey
Grey Matter Melody
Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.
Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.
Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.
I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.

Commentaries on the poetrys glady and happily wanted...……………….

i know i am guilty of this self-same form of expression, but i find it clichéd, using/combining/comparing opposites/polarized ideas under the guise or aegis of being poetic, like tomorrow's present or yesterday's roots, although i know that last one was exactly an oxymoron.
i like your poetic format though.

i didn't say that very well, but you know what i mean, right?

[h***@gmail.com]

Hey, Rachel! Guess what!?!

[r***@gmail.com]

Post by h***@gmail.com
Hey, Rachel! Guess what!?!

it's bed time ?

[r***@gmail.com]

Post by r***@gmail.com

Post by h***@gmail.com
Hey, Rachel! Guess what!?!

it's bed time ?

you got hi-jacked ?

[r***@gmail.com]

Post by r***@gmail.com

Post by h***@gmail.com
Hey, Rachel! Guess what!?!

it's bed time ?

ha ha tv just said polar opposite

[h***@gmail.com]

My son met the big hair guy from Ancient Aliens at work! LOL

[r***@gmail.com]

Post by h***@gmail.com
My son met the big hair guy from Ancient Aliens at work! LOL

I thought you didn't watch that show!!!

I guess he does. I never would have known!!! I'm not hip.

[h***@gmail.com]

I don't watch the show, but when my son came home
and said he met the guy, I thought of you. Funny, huh.

[r***@gmail.com]

Post by r***@gmail.com

Post by h***@gmail.com
My son met the big hair guy from Ancient Aliens at work! LOL

I thought you didn't watch that show!!!
I guess he does. I never would have known!!! I'm not hip.

oh sorry. WOW! COOL! (it is! that's how i would feel if i saw someone who's work/personality i enjoyed!!)

[Me]

Post by r***@gmail.com

Post by r***@gmail.com

Post by h***@gmail.com
My son met the big hair guy from Ancient Aliens at work! LOL

I thought you didn't watch that show!!!
I guess he does. I never would have known!!! I'm not hip.

oh sorry. WOW! COOL! (it is! that's how i would feel if i saw someone who's work/personality i enjoyed!!)

[h***@gmail.com]

It really wasn't a WOW! or a COOL! type of feeling,
but it wasn't a bad feeling either. It was just kind of
odd that I thought of you when he mentioned him.

This is probably the only place I've ever discussed
Ancient Aliens, and like it or not, you're the person
who comes to mind when I think of that big hair guy.

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
It really wasn't a WOW! or a COOL! type of feeling,
but it wasn't a bad feeling either. It was just kind of
odd that I thought of you when he mentioned him.
This is probably the only place I've ever discussed
Ancient Aliens, and like it or not, you're the person
who comes to mind when I think of that big hair guy.

but wasn't your SON like WOW/COOL! ? i would think that if it happened unexpectedly to me! (or even not unexpectedly!)

(was it mason? :)? i don't know anybody else's name, other than jean, sp...and your lovely angel, of course)(the maid of the kitchen, tee hee hee)

[h***@gmail.com]

Nah, celebrity doesn't phase him in
the slightest. It's just part of the job.

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
Nah, celebrity doesn't phase him in
the slightest. It's just part of the job.

oh okay.

well, i like it. i also respect it. i mean, i wouldn't be like, oooh, i like you so much, and then later be like, oh, it's just you.

i mean, i wouldn't express anything until i knew it was real.

like this guy told me about the kids' experience when a child star came to their school.

like each day, it got worse. from ooooohhh, to ohhh, to oh, to oh g-d...here he is again, type thing.

i mean, otoh, maybe that's what they experienced internally. that sort of makes sense.

i don't know. i was never friends with or in school with a celebrity, so i wouldn't know.

[h***@gmail.com]

Celebrity is just a thing, like a fancy coat.
Some wear it well, some don't, but under
the fancy, they're people just like you and
me, trying to make their way through life,
one day, one step, one choice at a time.
Make good choices. Do the best you can.

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
Celebrity is just a thing, like a fancy coat.
Some wear it well, some don't,

but under

Post by h***@gmail.com
the fancy, they're people just like you and
me, trying to make their way through life,
one day, one step, one choice at a time.
Make good choices. Do the best you can.

you lost your rhymes

[h***@gmail.com]

That's alright. That's okay.
That's not what I'm famous for anyway.

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
That's alright. That's okay.
That's not what I'm famous for anyway.

did you kill the most gooks?

[ME]

Post by Rachel

Post by h***@gmail.com
That's alright. That's okay.
That's not what I'm famous for anyway.

did you kill the most gooks?

That’s a very inappropriate thing to ask a veteran.

[Rachel]

Post by ME

Post by Rachel

Post by h***@gmail.com
That's alright. That's okay.
That's not what I'm famous for anyway.

did you kill the most gooks?

That’s a very inappropriate thing to ask a veteran.

what, don't you get awards for things like that? my israeli doctor did, iinm.

[ME]

Post by Rachel

Post by ME

Post by Rachel

Post by h***@gmail.com
That's alright. That's okay.
That's not what I'm famous for anyway.

did you kill the most gooks?

That’s a very inappropriate thing to ask a veteran.

what, don't you get awards for things like that? my israeli doctor did, iinm.

Really?

[Rachel]

Post by ME

Post by Rachel

Post by ME

Post by Rachel

Post by h***@gmail.com
That's alright. That's okay.
That's not what I'm famous for anyway.

did you kill the most gooks?

That’s a very inappropriate thing to ask a veteran.

what, don't you get awards for things like that? my israeli doctor did, iinm.

Really?

no, i'm lying.

[h***@gmail.com]

I know a lot of Vietnam vets who still,
and will continue to struggle with post
traumatic stress until the day they die.
Cannabis, and cognitive therapy helps.

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
I know a lot of Vietnam vets who still,
and will continue to struggle with post
traumatic stress until the day they die.
Cannabis, and cognitive therapy helps.

it's so awful for me, to think of people killing with guns.

like i tried, i don't know what it was. first saving private ryan, yesterday, couldn't do it, then django unchained, couldn't do it, then the color purple, that was okay, so i left it on, barely watching.

then django unchained was on again, and i caught the end, where he blows up the house. that was cool.

sometimes i just get hypersensitive to things. violence, in particular.

but i suppose if people were coming in here to attack and/or taking away our country...hell, i mean, if i had to protect my home with a gun, i would. i value my shelter. having a roof over my head. a room of my own. thank you g-d, jesus, america, mom and dad (set #2).

[h***@gmail.com]

Yeah, my cable went out yesterday, so a buddy of mine who isn't a vet
invited me over to watch old war movies, because that's what was on,
in commemoration of Veterans Day. I told him no thanks. War sucks.

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
Yeah, my cable went out yesterday, so a buddy of mine who isn't a vet
invited me over to watch old war movies, because that's what was on,
in commemoration of Veterans Day. I told him no thanks. War sucks.

did you watch pollyanna then cut your wrists?

[h***@gmail.com]

I did some old fashioned reading and writing. It felt really good too.

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
I did some old fashioned reading and writing. It felt really good too.

after you puffed on your huge bong?

[h***@gmail.com]

Okay, reading and writing are enjoyable
exercises in and of themselves for me,
and toking can enhance the experience.

Like now, I'm reading and writing with
you as we discuss the really huge bong
you imagine me puffing on right now.

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
Okay, reading and writing are enjoyable
exercises in and of themselves for me,
and toking can enhance the experience.
Like now, I'm reading and writing with
you as we discuss the really huge bong
you imagine me puffing on right now.

puff away! you deserve it!

[h***@gmail.com]

Consider this a formal
meeting, ma'am. How do you do?
What do you consider NORML,
and was this good for you?

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
Consider this a formal
meeting, ma'am. How do you do?
What do you consider NORML,
and was this good for you?

{{{{{HI}}}}}

[h***@gmail.com]

If I could have you here WITH me,
please don't think we'd ever KISS. We
MIGHT, in sight of all around,
and make a real loud KISSing sound,
so please be careful what you say,
and go have a wonderful day!

SMOOCH

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
If I could have you here WITH me,
please don't think we'd ever KISS. We
MIGHT, in sight of all around,
and make a real loud KISSing sound,
so please be careful what you say,
and go have a wonderful day!
SMOOCH

do you kiss your doggie?

[h***@gmail.com]

Wouldn't you like to know.

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
Wouldn't you like to know.

okay, how about telling me what you are going to have for lunch?!!?? :-D

[h***@gmail.com]

Free Food! Yay!

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
Free Food! Yay!

i'm having nacho kale chips for lunch, and campbell's tomato soup with milk and butter, and carrot juice, and pomegranate juice.

[Rachel]

Post by Rachel

Post by h***@gmail.com
Free Food! Yay!

i'm having nacho kale chips for lunch, and campbell's tomato soup with milk and butter, and carrot juice, and pomegranate juice.

i just saw this, for some strange reason.

the nazis are starting up again upstairs...i'm not sure if it was a little accident, or if they are planning on torturing me again today.

[Rachel]

Post by Rachel

Post by Rachel

Post by h***@gmail.com
Free Food! Yay!

i'm having nacho kale chips for lunch, and campbell's tomato soup with milk and butter, and carrot juice, and pomegranate juice.

i just saw this, for some strange reason.
the nazis are starting up again upstairs...i'm not sure if it was a little accident, or if they are planning on torturing me again today.

today's the end of my carrot juice, and even though it's so eezee, i'm switching to baby carrots, to eat. ugh. what a chore.

[h***@gmail.com]

All the restaurants around here are either
offering free, or discounted food for vets.
Some places are so popular they have lines.

I have no idea what I want for lunch yet,
so I'll probably go stand in line somewhere,
and ask the other vets what they're having.

[Rachel]

Post by h***@gmail.com
All the restaurants around here are either
offering free, or discounted food for vets.
Some places are so popular they have lines.
I have no idea what I want for lunch yet,
so I'll probably go stand in line somewhere,
and ask the other vets what they're having.

great! tell 'em i said hi! (reminds me of that line from pretty woman)

[h***@gmail.com]

I did. That was fun, thanks.

[Rachel]

Post by Rachel

Post by h***@gmail.com
Consider this a formal
meeting, ma'am. How do you do?
What do you consider NORML,
and was this good for you?

{{{{{HI}}}}}

{{{{{{HI AND HIS ANGEL}}}}}}

[General Zod]

Post by h***@gmail.com

Post by h***@gmail.com
Celebrity is just a thing, like a fancy coat.
Some wear it well, some don't,

but under

Post by h***@gmail.com
the fancy, they're people just like you and
me, trying to make their way through life,
one day, one step, one choice at a time.
Make good choices. Do the best you can.

you lost your rhymes

Wondrerouas poetry...………………...

[Ellen Horny]

Post by General Zod
Wondrerouas poetry...………………...

You didn't answer why you used Grey instead of Gray. Blue and the Gray. Grey's Anatomy. Greyhound. Gray matter. Confederate gray.

[General Zod]

Post by r***@gmail.com

Post by Mr. Spacey
Grey Matter Melody
Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.
Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.
Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.
I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.

Commentaries on the poetrys glady and happily wanted...……………….

i know i am guilty of this self-same form of expression, but i find it clichéd, using/combining/comparing opposites/polarized ideas under the guise or aegis of being poetic, like tomorrow's present or yesterday's roots, although i know that last one was exactly an oxymoron.
i like your poetic format though.

Hello Rachel...…………………………...

[Rachel]

Post by General Zod

Post by r***@gmail.com

Post by Mr. Spacey
Grey Matter Melody
Tomorrow receives
the roots
to these moments.
Your eyes
are closed now
to my soul.
Newspapers and radios
report
and they tell me
where your head is at.
I'm shooting
for between the eyes
fighting a dread
of a dismal future.

Commentaries on the poetrys glady and happily wanted...……………….

i know i am guilty of this self-same form of expression, but i find it clichéd, using/combining/comparing opposites/polarized ideas under the guise or aegis of being poetic, like tomorrow's present or yesterday's roots, although i know that last one was exactly an oxymoron.
i like your poetic format though.

Hello Rachel...…………………………...

hellooooooooooooooooo